Wednesday, September 30, 2009

Joe the Writer

I know he's only 8. And I know he's only in 3rd grade. But this got me so excited today that I had to share!
Jonah took this paragraph:
"On a morning in 1609, a man made his way over a bridge. He wore a jacket and a cap. His clothes were splashed with mud, and mud sucked at his shoes. He could hardly see for the rain in his face."
and turned it into this:
"On a foggy morning in 1609, a mysterious man made his way over a muddy bridge. He wore a damp jacket and a cap. His clothes were splashed with mud, and mud sucked at his shoes. He could hardly see for the cold rain in his face."
Much better, right?!
His teacher thinks he's destined for greatness. ;)

3 comments:

April said...

amazing job!!! i think he has a future...

Mel (AKA Dad, Grampa) said...

Perhaps the apple doesn't fall far from the tree. I seem to remember his mom winning an essay contest...

Mel (AKA Dad, Grampa) said...

Amazing Jonah...gammie